Prime Cause
Eva, in a tattered dress,Sought the tree of happiness;Adam, wanting harmony,Tried bravely to ignore the tree.His eyes, his ears, his mouth were shut,He waited anxious in the hut,While Eva,...
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Beautifully written, the flow is excellent and the imagery strong (even if the feminist in me can't help reacting to the 'woman as root of sin' )"Write the bad things that are done to you in sand, but...
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this is well crafted, davicletay ... nicely done!I embrace my desire to feel the rhythm, to feel connected enough to step aside and weep like a widow,to feel inspired, to fathom the power, to witness...
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Excellent writing! The imagery is strong and the rhythm superb. Well done!
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Thank everyone for the nice remarks about this - I wrote it some time ago, and it was very surprising how easily it slipped out! I feel that it's been rather distanced from the Bible story - what's...
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